CITY
SIDEWALK
Snow on the
sidewalk, front and rear steps, the paths around to the back and the trash
pit. Grandpa’s job to clear it. Until he
died. Now it remains, this first snow of
winter.
With the
promise of hot cocoa and donuts, my sister and I hack away. Just the official
width, no more, no less.
snow flying–
the
rhythmic scraping
of
Grandpa’s shovelModern Haibun & Tanka Prose, Issue 2, Winter 2009
8 comments:
Beautiful, Adelaide. "rhythmic" is the word that does the magic.
Thanks, Bill. I hope we've seen the last of the snow for this season.
Adelaide
Terrific haibun, Adelaide - You continue in top form.
Warren
Thanks, Warren. Pretty soon I'm going to run out of useful memories.
Adelaide
Hi, tried to post something yesterday, but for some reason it didn't "take."
Anyway, great work. I agree about "rhythmic" in the haiku (I also like "flying"). In the prose, the most poignant line to me, in addition to the last one, is this:
Now it remains, this first snow of winter.
Thank you, Janet, for your comments. We hated the job, but after Grandpa died, it was our job.
Adelaide
nostalgic, beautiful, a perfect tribute
much love...
Thank you, Gillena
Adelaide
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