Sunday, September 4, 2011

Haibun




THE GOOD LIFE

everything you need everything you want at the mall clothes for school clothes for work at the mall running shoes party shoes fill your house your garage at the mall come today come tomorrow hang out here meet your friends at the mall short of cash charge it now at the mall  everything you need everything you want at the mall

                                                indoor garden
                                              the artificial color
                                                     of roses

Simply Haiku, March 2011

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4 comments:

Gillena Cox said...

nice back to school piece; really like the presentation of your rose image

much love
gillena

Adelaide said...

thank you, Gillena.

Adelaide

Bill said...

The placing of "artificial" is very effective. The prose is a bit more poetic than is common in haibun, and it works.

Adelaide said...

Thanks Bill. Glad to stopped by.

Adelaide

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